Q1: I'm fairly satisfied with my W2. I feel that I stayed much more on topic than WP1. Of course I'm a bit hesitant about it because there's always room to improve, but I'm satisfied with my topic of underage drinking and the way I structured the essay and I managed to fit it all into six pages! I also think the articles I found provided really good examples. I'm still unsure about my thesis statement. It fits my argument, but I don't know if I should be more specific.
Q2: Three comments: One helpful comment was that I should elaborate on course concepts that I mention in the paper, like moves and conventions. It shows that you're not just saying things and it's a good outlet to incorporate evidence from the readings. My peer reviewer also suggested that I elaborate on one of the moves I introduced; rather than just saying the author did it and provide a quote, I should explain how the quote shows that he is making that move. She also told me to further explain the significance of the difference between qualitative and quantitative approaches.
"Painting Trees" Question Responses:
1. What are some "moves you see in these videos?
Distant Trees:
sharp edges
short, vertical strokes
close together
reload brush frequently
"pond illusion" by painting bigger trees toward outside
bilateral symmetry of image
"planes" caused by shade gradients
dry, horizontal stroke to make reflections
Making Mountains
uses straight edge knife, drag edge along canvas to scrape off paint
2 inch soft wet brush to pull paint diagonally--drag color across to cause fad
Painting an Evergreen
fan brush, pull and wiggle it through paint, lots of paint
corner of brush to tap canvas back & forth to make branches, wider on bottom, "don't overkill"
Disney video:
Mark: arrangement of upward & outward lines, charcoal on light gray paper, 3D quality, black & white paint.
Josh: biggest brush with oil paint and lighter fluid, switches to palate knives, "careful & precise".
Ivand: focuses on trunk, casene for fine detail, texture of trunk bark.
Walt: strong, straight inclines, geometric interpretations (architecture).
2.How do these artists (Bob Ross and the Disney painters) describe what they’re doing? What do the artists refer to while they describe their work? What do they talk about? What do they direct our attention towards?
Walt: He talks about how he envisions his painting, what he wants it to look like. "I can see myself drawing it". Makes comparisons to architectural structures, geometric interpretations. "I have to be very careful to..." "I still look at it with an architectural perspective"
Josh: Sees tree as living thing w/ personality, wants to work fast and efficiently yet with careful & precision. "I consider ___ important".
Ivand: Sees richness and variety in nature. Won't paint the whole tree, will focus on trunk. "portrait of a tree trunk". Focuses on trunk's texture."I need to do this..."
Mark: Interested in growth pattern and bony structure."later, you will see how I use white". "of course, I can't do this until I do this". "There must be good design"
3.How would you characterize each artist's style, and what impact does their style have on you (a viewer/audience member)? How have these artists chosen to portray their subject matter?
Walt has a "modern style" and uses geometric patterns to reinforce the idea of a tree as architecture. The image is unique and at first mind-blowing, not what the eyes expect.
I would say Mark had the "simplest" style, using black and white and not immense detail. When I think of painting a tree, this is how I would try to do it.
Josh I thought was realistic and abstract at the same time. Natural colors and crazy brush strokes. It's more aesthetically pleasing.
Ivand's was my favorite. The trunk detail was the most realistic and had the biggest "Disney" vibe.
We had similar ideas as far as which artists we favored more, even in the way we thought about how we would have went about painting the tree. I like how you included specific quotes of what is said because it makes it easier to follow your explanation. I also like how you named the move in relation to the move they were actually doing, but then you explained what that move includes. The descriptions you provide are simple and easy to follow.
ReplyDeleteI thought you did a great job of identifying a lot of different moves that each of the artists make within each of the videos. I also liked the fact that you used specific examples from the videos to support your claims for the second question. I thought your analysis on the style of each of the artists was really detailed and I liked that you brought your own opinions to explain what you thought of each of their styles.
ReplyDeleteHey Jordan! I thought that you did a really great job of describing some of the moves that were similar to all of the paintings. Not only did you mention certain features, but you also mentioned specific techniques that were used in multiple videos and I thought this was really impressive. It may have been helpful to include why some of these moves kept appearing over and over again in each video, but I understand that we didn’t have a lot of time to complete this assignment. Also, I loved how you integrated direct quotes into your response – it made your analysis more credible and it was a creative approach to answering the question. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI like how you listed the moves by video, I feel like I messed up on my organization now.Breaking up the moves and impact by artist was another good idea. I can see that we differed in how we saw the artists works, but I like how you described each artist's work. Your explanations and organization make for a smooth reading.
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